Translation Challenge: Psalm 17:8
The text of Psalm 17:8 brilliantly combines two Hebrew expressions, pairing both their meaning and their underlying semantic basis: shomreini k’ishun bat-ayin//b’tzel k’nafecha tastireini, that is, “guard-me like-a-dark-spot of daughter-of-eye//in-the-shadow of your-wings hide-me.”
The first expression is “keep me like the pupil of your eye,” almost universally rendered, “keep me like the apple of your eye.” (The only version I know of that translates ishun literally is the NJB: “Guard me as the pupil of an eye.”).
The second expression is, “hide me in the shadow of your wings,” and, again, translations show very little variation.
But the brilliant part of Psalm 17:8 is the juxtaposition of ishun (“dark spot”) with tzel (“shadow”), a trick every translation misses.
What we would need to complement “apple of your eye” in the same way is another expression involving fruit.
Any suggestions for a good translation of Psalm 17:8?
(Extra points if you preserve the chiasmus, and triple extra points if you can figure out what bat ayin means.)
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October 16, 2009 -
Posted by Joel H. |
translation challenge, translation practice | Bible translation, expression, idiom, metaphor, Psalm 17:8, Psalms
From AGS
I certainly missed the darkness/shadow image – but here’s what I did a year or so ago
keep me
as an eye’s child, an eye’s pupil
under the shadow of your wing
hide me
(1) Protect me as you would your eye’s own pupils; in the shadow of your wings, shelter me.
(2) Protect me as you would your baby blues; In your wing’s indigo shadow, shelter me.
[I constantly feel like I'm taking a test where the best possible grade is a D-].
B+ for effort. Number 2 made me laugh.
At the risk of exposing myself as a complete Hebrew newbie, here’s a shot preserving the image-pair and the chiasmus in English, and a guess at the meaning and poetic significance of bat ayin:
Like a father would a little boy or daughter,
protect me instinctively,
as one would the dark pupil-spot center of the eye.
In the dark, the quiet place surrounded by your shadow
let me find protective refuge
as a chick beneath your parental wings
The word for pupil here is ishun, which, while meaning “pupil” is suggestive of “little man.” It is immediately followed by bat ayin, literally, “daughter of eye,” which not only is a poetic restatement of what the pupil is (as a tender and protected part of the eye), but also a poetic complement to the “iyshon.”
Do I have anything there, or am I way off?
“The apple of his eye” has been described to me as a Hebraism…a Hebrew idiom of sorts. Therefore, the Hebrew words are not to be interpreted literally.
When you stand before someone and look in his or her eyes, you see your own imagine. This image of yourself is the “apple” in their eye. To be the apple of God’s eye is to be close enough to Him to see ourselves in His eyes! It’s an endearment and expression of His deep love for each of us!